All Comments on 'Is this Forever'

The story itself comes across as generally heartfelt, though a tad rushed. The personal bits you did include came through quite well. For the time period you covered, your story could have gone twice the length, or even three pages.

You may get dinged, though, on the dropped words, usage errors, and punctuation. You have potential; see if you can find a volunteer reader or editor to give your work the once-over. Pay attention to suggested corrections, and after a while, you will stop making those errors. It will be tough, because some people won't read porn and some porn readers won't read incest. Check the forums and don't give up. Eventually you will find volunteers. Keep writing. Many may criticize, but completing a story and posting it is an accomplishment. The trick now is to hone your skills, including grammar and sentence construction. Good job. Slainté

Your story was well written and certainly covered the lust they both shared and I think his sister not only wanted him sexually but was possibly making up for the way she was harsh to him when he was young ? It is a hot story -- maybe he will in his professional career, he will be in her area for an extended period and they can have more unexpected fun ?? That would be exciting ...... thank you.

Good story, but I'd enjoy another chapter.

Well written, good story arc, believable characters and emotional involvement. All in all I enjoyed this story a lot... Now I want more! ;)

Fine and touching story and quite believable...atrocious grammar, spelling and syntax!! You would get 5 stars IF you got an editor or a simple proofreader!!!

If you really loved her and you are smart..stay in town and keep fucking her.

Add a chapter and make IT A GOOD ENDING

you should tell us more. *****

After reading a previous story I thought you might have acquired a proof reader, but you haven't. Consequently I couldn't get past the first paragraph.

Good story , keep it up. AAAA+++

Had tongive it one star because it is unfinished after chapter 3.