by darknirish
It is my humble opinion that people who feel justified in criticising an author's grammar should at least be able to spell themselves.
Good story but you use the word 'she' to much, it started to get annnoying. A couple of the paragraphs are to long and could have done with breaking up into smaller one's. I found myself losing my place in the story a couple of times because of it, so that doesn't help. Other than that, a good story.