All Comments on 'It's All Fun and Games'

Story could have been good if it hadn't been for all of the spelling and grammar errors. Proof read before submitting.

but it needs a lot of work, some of the words were incomplete. Early on I noticed (show) instead of (shower). I recommend having someone on the site proofread then resubmit, it will make for a much easier and enjoyable experience to read.

This happened once before. I graded it a 2, but instead 4 stars came up. What's going on, Literotica?