All Comments on 'Jack's Women Ch. 02'

That was awesome hope to see more stories soon..

Awesome. Keep it coming. You are on a roll. Great roll.

I love this story, parts have me wondering what the hell!!

But I still love it more please and like now lol

Amazing what a determined man with a gun and a plan can do. Fine story and looking forward to more.

I love this series! Great story, love the first 2 chapters. More! I love the style and writing, only other comment is "KEEPEM COMIN". and thanks for sharing.

I love the story so far, but have a few basic grammar problems that prevent it from being a great story. You do need an editor and proofreader... you continually use "you're" when you mean "your." Furthermore, you jump between first and third person perspective, making it more confusing to read.

A very good attempt, especially as this is your first attempt at Literotica fiction.

For me, however, although the spelling and grammar mistakes are an irritation, your irregular switch from 3rd to first person singular ruins the flow completely. It is so irritating.

after reading your other series i had to try this one, GREAT

Jack finds a ex Ranger Sgt. and bring him along. sqhead

The possessive form is 'your' not "you're".

Meh. Bad grammar. Story already has too many holes in it. I'm done. 2 stars.