All Comments on 'Jeff Edgar'

I don't even know what to think about this. She vomits on his dick, then punches him in the dick, then they have anal sex and the whole classroom walks in on the screaming ass-rape, all the while, all that evidence of blackmail just sitting out in the open for everyone to connect the dots. Sounds like someone's budding blackmail career is over.

This could be comedy, but it's kinda gross.

Not in a good way. Like a recounting of a dream that makes no sense. Lots of promise in the writing, but totally boring in the details and the actual telling. Try being a little more realistic.