All Comments on 'Jessie'

There were a few little errors here and there, and adding a few commas in some places wouldn't go astray, but overall this wasn't bad. I liked that you went to the effort to put in a bit of a backstory.. hinting at her having babysat him and perhaps his brother. Very naughty. Though I thought his 10 inch long, wrist wide.. instrument, was a little.. well, cliche.