All Comments on 'Joanna's Story Ch. 04'

Sheer tedium: the author hasn't a clue how to write. . . anything.

Everything is narrated in the past tense, so there's no sense of 'being there'. Everything has happened -- off-stage -- so there's no visual thrill to experience. And when it's not in the past tense from the author's pen, it's in the past tense from some character or other 'conversing' with another character in voices and speech patterns that are all exactly the same.

So dialog, it ain't. Everything's wooden, formal, trite and tedious.

Maybe learning more about writing, and less about BDSM -- which in these 'stories' is downright ludicrous -- would be best. Then perhaps one, just one, of the various forenames tossed into this farrago will emerge as a fully-fledged character of flesh and blood.

Doubtful though.