All Comments on 'Jogging Memories Ch. 01'

Is this going to be drawn out a page at a time? Why if it is a long story? I give it a three for that reason. The break was not even a cliffhange

Waverunner

Maybe the writer should jog his memory on how to end a chapter, was interesting up to that point!!!

I've read novels, and this ain't one. Just a string of disconnected sentences strung together. I gave you 2 stars because at least you had the courage to write and submit. Don't stop writing, you'll get better with time.

I submitted this as 23 Literotica size pages, a full novel of 82,000 words, but due to a glitz, only the first page, consisting of half the Prologue and half Chapter 1 came out. This isn't the first novel I have submitted and all 23 pages were there when previewed, so I cannot explain what happened. I have submitted and edited chapter 1 again and 3 other parts, taking us up to chapter 8 which is about halfway through. I have to go out now and will have to do a football programme when I get back so will split the rest of the book into chapters and upload tomorrow.

After looking at the list of characters and trying to connect them, I gave up reading. Just too convoluted for me. I just don't have the patience to wade through the characters, much less the story itself.

will the cognizance ever return, TK U MLJ LV NV

The story has promise, but some of the sentences are unwieldy. Too many clauses to absorb without rereading.

Will continue to read, but hope the structure improves a bit.

Looking forward to reading more.

Lots of names and people, and flashing around - all good, just a lot. It took a bit of investment on my part to put all the pieces in place to move forward.