All Comments on 'Jordan's Mommy Ch. 01 Pt. 01'

More Please :D

keep em cumming!!!!!!! mommy wants more,please..............

So good I can't wait to read what is going to happen next and see what happens when Jordan's friends come over.

Good story, though,having "mommy" in every sentence was a bit distracting.

While I did enjoy the story I was a little disappointed that the writer took the mother to the heterosexual point of view, it would have been so much better if she had stuck with female friends. You have a great story but don't spoil it with the gang bang with males.

Another great erotic story Lusty. I can't wait to see what Jordan does next with her mommy. Please don't make us wait long for the next chapter. ;)

Here is another example of pure garbage. The author can't hardly write a complete sentence without the use of "word ... word" it should be deleted or edited removing all this waste.

Let Miss Jordan punish mommy`s entire body from her tities to her ass to her pussy...make mommy beg to be punished...leave boys out of story...maybe some girlfriends but no boys...leave it to daughter and girlfriends and maybe even lady friends to punish mommy

I can't take anymore to wait your additional submission...

Role revarsal of relation between mother&daughter is higest erotic item.

Pls, go on!

. . .but you need to do more proofreading to correct all the errors. I'd also suggest, to broaden your readership, that you introduce more sex (as opposed to purely the punishment aspect) in future installments. And I agree with one commenter that you shouldn't just go only the male gang bang route.

this is a very valid and REAL depiction of youthful dominance, which i have experienced. i thought it was well-written and very descriptive.

Delightful story

Possibly a minor point but I've read thousands of erotic writers and you are the very first that seems to understand that Mother, Mom, Mama, are in caps when used as a title and not capitalized when used as a generic name for a group of special women,such as "her mom or their mother". But besides that, I really like this story so far and I hope it continues to be about dominance and submission rather than beating and kicking like the men write about. I always love GOOD role reversal stories and this one seems to be very special!

I couldn't read far past the beginning of the second page due to the fact that, while you apparently understand how "please" is spelled, you chose to use text speak and write "plzzzz" a thousand times. Maybe I'm crazy, but it was just too distracting to enjoy the story. Also, while I understand some stress on the "mommy" thing, I don't believe you need to use the word mommy ten times per paragraph.

Jordan is sich a BITCH I'd love to be her slave

Have you never heard of the MOTHER?!?! Her mother NOT Mommy! And Mommy sounds really babyish! It makes sound like a young child has written this story!

That's it. Just HOT! Looking forward to part two.

sort of cute