by Wes99
enjoyed story or fragment, a little too much Raymond Chandler mixed in but acceptable, nice detailing, emotion and sex act well done, sometimes the word order in descriptions seemed unorthodox or reversed but perhaps a stylistic devise. My only complaint is that that is a photo of my girlfriend, well not really. A little editing and it is publishable. you have real talent!
The photograph was attached within the text, for some reason it didn't appear with the story.
The story is really well-written and developed, it embraces the reader into the (un-)reality of the situation, dipping him/her into the silent lust of the moment and the deepness of the sensations - GREAT!