All Comments on 'June's Essay'

I'd love to hear your feedback on this story

I shouldn't really comment on how someone writes as i am not particularly that good myself, but I get what she wanted to write about, however I question how she allowed herself to do what she did, did she feel any better after doing all these things? Perhaps she did.

Anyway nice attempt at trying to explore what is a very complex character.

obvious a true story , in high school and young we sometimes do things like that out of pure lust ,i enjoyed it

of our kids.

The writer needs to go back to elementary school and learn basic grammer, sentence structure, and how to speak correctly.

I really liked the voice in this piece. Made me think of how Faulkner writes from the perspective of the Bundren kids. Not that I'm saying this subject is Faulknerian, simply the voice reminded me of it. The dialogue was nicely executed, too. And it was sexy, so that's a plus. Keep up the good work!