by Mentalcase
I'm surprised at how Paul and Ashley fell for each other xD But now everything's back to how it's supposed to be, except the voice is getting pretty damn annoying.
Absolutely great chapter. I'm sending you a better review through Tumblr (I want to get used to it), but it's my duty to leave a note here to state my thanks. I'm looking forward to read about the start of the new semester, whenever it is posted. Nice work, mentalcase!
Personally, I kept getting the feeling Matt and Missy have been doing it for even longer than Mike and his sisters have, they are just better at hiding it.
adding matt to the story was great and he was funny as hell even better then the voice.the part where beth spilled sauce on her boob had me rolling and in tears.great story cant wait till the next chapter.and yes need to get matt and his sister together...
This just keeps getting better and better. Can't wait for the next one Mental... Don't let the detractors get you down though, they ain't worth shit... :D
*wipes tears of laughter* Matt is a riot and I agree with one of the other comments, I too got the feeling Matt and Missy have been "together" for some time.
Matt's "you know you love it!" had me in stitches.
Keep up the great chapters.
Five stars!!!
To borrow from "The Voice", Sleep when you're dead. Now get to writing Chapter 21 already! Heh heh.
Loved it. Want to hear more about Matt and Missy. More socializing with Paul and Ashley, making them more comfortable together.
Mental, your story is awesome. I can't wait until ch 21. The voice gets funnier all the time. Love your work and dont worry about the haters just keep doing what your doing.
Each chapter of this story is better than the previous one! Please keep on writing!!!
This is a great chapter only I think it was almost too easy to get Ashley and her bro together but thats ok. I loved the beginning it the supermarket and at the end a few more group encounters between siblings would be great also. Thanks a ton I can hardly wait to see what's next. I only hope ever brother and sister we meet aren't lovers I'd hate to see too many complications lol.
Simply awesome, you have a gift.. Already wanting more.. Guess I'll have to reread it all... yet again.. Thanks for such an amazing story.
You really wrote a great story. There is a stroryline and the sex is good.
I was just wondering if there will be a time where Mike will be able to fuck one of his sister while the other can watch or better a fivesome.
I also feel the need to tell you that it's cool he spends his night with Danny but if he neglects the other it's not fair. He says he loves all his sisters and even Danni is his favorite I think it lacks of romance with the others
Dear Writer,
Bring Misty Back! She is hot! Have mike seduce her! OR
More romance in the sisters - with more ass smacking outrageous acts by Mike or sex in odd places.
I LOVED the grocery scene with Sarah, the Morning wake up with Danni mounting him, the surfboard scene with Emma, and the hot shower seduction with Beth. Include more memorable sudden forced and romantic seductions.
Other than that though GREAT WRITING Your going 20 chapters strong!!!!
Impressed!
Dasman
This feels like the best chapter in a long while since Mike is at the mercy of "the voice". Much hilarity and erotica ensues. Great job
Ok, love all your work, thus chapter especially, you should get Matt to fuck his sister, then have some kind of orgy with mike and his sisters, and paul and matta and their sisters. Just saying, it would be hot. Anyway, love it! Keep writing, please! :-) :-P
This whole series is great, never get tired of reading it, it just keeps getting better. THANK YOU!!!!!
I have read a lot of erotica and a lot of crap on this site .
Your series is very dayam good .Love the mix of erotica / sex/ buildup ,just the whole dayam story.Please keep writing this series .I'm loving it.
AEP-Perth West Australia
You have done a great job of intertwining several threads with enough "meat" that it isn't all fuck. It has been a while since i've read a story that leaves me wishing there were more! Please, keep it up, your literary talent shines through.
This chapter was great. Liked the way you did Paul and Ash. Adding Matt was a blast to read . Laugh my ass off . Thanks for another great chapter.
I gota tell you that normally I only add the first chapter of a series to my favorites list but not only have I added every chapter but you are now my favorite author. From the beginning I was hooked. I also enjoy the way you built up the chairicters and gave all of them their little quirks. It honestly didn't feel like I was reading a porn because you put an actual story to it. I also love the fact that you had that little demonic voice in Mike's head providing laughter through out the entire story. Thank you for the great story.
absolutely outstanding... kept me hooked till the very end.. super.. keep up the good work.. we need more like these.. :)
I loved how it played out, perfect, in my opinion. The plan worked and all are happy. Love this story, keep up the amazing work!
Can't wait for the next one.
Damn it.
This is THE BEST story ever! not just an average porn tale, but has a real story. It has been a pleasure to read and i do hope the tale continues! (oh wait it will)
I am really liking Emma's submissive side. This is the best story I have ever read here.
In all honesty I was worried about where you were taking these chapters. However, you handled the development even better than I'd hoped, and even managed to throw in a few small shockers while maintaining the character roles.
Very impressive writing as always.
Cant wait until chapter 21 is up keep up the great work
I was at first plainly worried that you were going to have the night turn into one big orgy and frankly I think that would have ruined the series for me if everyone was sexing up everyone but I should have had more faith and I apologise. The way you took it was exceptional as always, keep up the good work.
Enjoyable series - indeed !!
Chapter 21 ?? Please ??
Thanks for a well written series.
I really think you need to work beths nasty voice in her head into the story again.:) Would be a funny read with mikes voice all worked up .
Please keep this story going for as much as you have in you. This line is great and you are giving us readers the respect we appreciate.
This is by far the best story I've ever read on literotica. Great job. Please keep it up.
Something that I thought was funny. For the longest time, I did not understand the title. It was a few chapters later when Mark counted out five people in the sex circle and the Voice said Six. I laughed my ass off at that. Great story. Hope you keep it going. Would love to help you proof read, but if not no biggie.
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Once I started to to read this, I could not stop. I laughed is some chapters because of the humor. It was enjoyable reading, I would love to see Mike get them all pregnant now.
These are awesome and hot stories. Anyway, wondering, whats Beth's Voice doing?
I love this series! Best on literotica to be honest. But I would be hoping if you could set up an anal scenario for the twins maybe? Just a thought. Also, keep up the fantastic work! :D
I have to keep coming back to this story and reading it over and over. All of the characters are great and I am eagerly awaiting the next few chapters to see how their lives carry on from here and who stays together or if any leave. Fantastic story.
An amazing story. I would love for you to keep Matt and Missy in, and I'm loving the whole slave/master thing with Emma. Hoping to see an anal seen with danni next. Thanks again for this amazing series mental case
Thank you for the work you are putting into this story. I love every single chapter!
For the future I would wish that Matt will get into a relationship with Missy, with Matt's offensive and Missy's defensive attitude it could be hell fun!
Afterwards Mike, Paul and Matt would make an excellent trio, backing up eachother on dates with their sisters in public.
Intriguing. A brother dominating his sister. Not many S&M/ master/sub type incest situations out there. Still this seems like something I have read here before.
WHAT DO I DO NOW?? no more chapters to read!! ,,,, i am hooked on this story,,,i love this family,,,hope it stays intact but who knows??
i hope more chapters are coming soon,,,in the meantime,,,i am going to start back at the beginning and read it again!! best series story on literotica i have read so far!! thank you so much,,,,btw,,,i appreciate good grammar as much as the next person but some annonymous persons need to lighten up and get over themselves,,,we are amateur readers and the writers are amateurs as well,,,,((lol)) its all good!!
Just finished reading the entire series thus far in the past week, one of the best erotic stories I have read In awhile. It's replaced Camp: Rons Story as my favorite written series. Just keep doing what you do, I could ask for a list of things like others but then it wouldn't be your story, it would be you trying to make everyone happy. Like others I enjoyed the fact you didn't turn the bar b cue party into and orgy. I do wonder where your going with Danni's friend Megan. She has had a bit of focus before and my money is on her being the one to make a grab at mikes cock the night of the slumber party when he had to escape to the pool. I'll be checking for the next chapter, if you ever want another set of eyes email me at onesickpuppy79@gmail.com. I have some of my own short stories posted on the forums over at jabcomix.com
Just read all the chapters and finally clued in to the the sixth character in the title when the voice said he was six in chapter 19. Not usually an incest fan, but I am enjoying your horny, funny voice. I hope there is lots more to come. Dave
Surely there's either something more to talking dick, or other people talk to their private parts/hormones as well.
I just read all 20 parts of the story in a row, and I absolutely love the story you've written. It's easily my favorite on the entire site. Your characters are well written and intriguing. And the Voice makes for an interesting addition to the cast, having its own personality. I can't wait to see more/I hope there will be further adventures for the family.
I just read through all 20 chapters, its better then porn. I'm serious, this had my jizzin in my pant every chapter. and would love to know if your continuing on this wonderfull story. if you plan to stop, i will be disapointed, but if you continue. you will become my favorite author. if you plan on continuing contact me at lycanmonster@yahoo.com .
yeah i just read the next chapter is comin out and would love to know when it comes out, this story caught me by surprise when i first read it, i thought it would be like this other story i read here, but complete apologization on my part, this is by far the best semi book here, i want to congratulate you on your success on this intriguing story.
I have to say that this is one of my favorite stories on this website. As cliche as it sounds, I wait with bated breath for the next addition to this novel. I think that you need to actually make this, once it is finished, into a published work. I love your character developments they are put into these situations that may or may not be ordinary. You write amazing characters that I as the reader can really get to know and give them such independence that they clearly stand out as an individual, I can't tell you how many stories I have read where halfway through a story I forget who is who and whats going on. I applaude you in your work sir and salute you for your magnificent contribution.
I have been reading your chapters for the last 36 hours-ish, I have been in class reading on my cell phone even!!! I am such a girl so I enjoy the dramatic parts the best. So hopefully you can add some more dramatic scenes. Otherwise seriously ADDICTED and I will wait for the next chapter!!!
This is easily the best thing i have ever read on this website. from the outstanding character development to the great detailed erotic sections to the dark humor that fitted brilliantly i applaud you on the best adult fiction ever!!!!!
firstly i agree with everyone so far in saying that this is obviously the best thing on this website, also love the humor and the awkward scenarios. i have read through all the comments and i like the idea about matt and missy already being in a relationship. i know that there was a mention of anal with em a way back and i think that would be awesome.i also love the part of including beth's dark voice and the trio of mates between matt, mike and paul. never let danni change her character she has said she will never do anything with any of the others and that is a good thing it adds variety and a complexity that most stories lack, he can do three/foursome with the others but danni is the independent one he loves the most. of course you have never let us down and continue to be an inspiration so i dont care if you dont add any of my suggestions cause what you bring out will probably be better anyway. this needs to be published i love this story!!!!!!!!
I just finished up reading all of the chapters. I love your story! I can't wait to see what's next!
There are several series on this site that I've started to read, only to find I either don't like the direction they go, or I just plain get bored. Neither is the case with this one! I really like how there is always plenty of build-up, followed by great sex scenes.
If I were allowed a suggestion, it would be to capitalize on Emma's submissive side. That would spice it up nicely. Also, I think definitely Mike should have anal sex with her! Very. Hot.
Thank you so much for your writing!
loved the series so far. Are there any more stories to this series?
man i hope u continue this story it is so good it keeps you interested in it all the time
one thing i personally would like to see is have them get matt together with his sister
You have so many places to go!! Emma's new submissive side, and her, Sarah and Beth's bisexualities! Danni could start exploring too! There's even some storyline in Beth's Voice! You can go anywhere with this! Please keep writing!
Well shit, I've gotten through these 20 chapters twice now. The story attracts me so much because I have 4 sisters as well with one of them being my fraternal twin. Although I also have a brother, both my parents are still alive and together and none of my sisters share the names of the sisters in the story, it's still...astoundingly similar and I find it hard to stop imagining what it would be like were I to be this lucky. I'm 19 and have been in quite the dry-spell in the girlfriend department, probably 4 months since I last had sex. In the image of how I imagine these sisters though, I'd have to say that *my* twin looks exactly like Danni and just as perfect in my eyes. Still, I'm way too aprehensive to ever suggest anything sexual like this even though I want her badly and we tease each other constantly, especially now that I'm home from college for the summer. But awesome read, and as I said, it really feels like it was made personally for me to live out my fantasies in my head. Hopefully there's a chapter 21.
started reading at about 10pm and couldn't tare myself away until about 4am this evening and even that was hard very very good. can't wait till you release the next chapter and hope you continue writing
I just completed your series. I have to say that this for the story behind it had me on edge wanting more then some of the Non sexual novels I have read. Very well done and Great job keep it up... I like Danni being straight. And the voice... again BRILLIANT!!!!
I love this story. The characters seem so alive they just jump off the page at you. I truly appreciate the fact that, unlike another epic erotic incest story, the problems this family has to overcome in order to stay together are manageable and don't work as a distraction from the mood. In fact, they enhance it.
Keep on writing! I would love to hear more about Beth's inner voice, Sarah's "mysterious" sexual past with Sally, and i suspect there is a Missy/Matt incest line in there somewhere.
This is the most facinating story I have read here. Each Chapter is better then the last. MORE MORE please.
. i love these stories. i masturbated to them. i want to fuck my sisters just like that.
I found this story and did a nonstop read. I love the voice. The one liners are awesome, right time right place in the story. The interaction with Mike and his inner voice made this a great read.
lol----Lookatherboobs i laughed so hard.
Thank you for sharing
I have just completed all 20 chapters. I can not even begin to tell you how many times I have cam, reading your stories. They were all great 1-20, I could not stop reading, it took me about 3 days and some naps in between to get it all done. The naps were because I cam so hard it put me to sleep. oh my, I am going back to read 18 again just to fall back in love with Beth. Thank you, keep writing.
This is a fantastic story. It has some parallels to Party of Five, and I love it. This is one of the best stories I've read on this site and I cannot wait for more. I'm gonna start re-reading it. It's awesome and you've done a great job with it. Thank you!!!
This is one of the best stories I ever read on literotica, the English site as well as the German one. Thanks to the author.
The Storyline up to this point is great.
Greetings from Germany.
Man I totally like this story cant wait to read the next part!
Just make sure they all stay faithful to their family members.
And Missy is so into Matt you totally can see this. Just stay within the Family and i think people will love each future Part.
As the commentor before me.
greetings from Germany
Seriously, this is actually one of yhe best series ever that i've read from literotica. The storyline is amazing, all the characters are absoluteley awesome, and reall its been excellent reading. Hopefully you'll go further with this series, or if not, even just with the characters themselves, one ends up falling in love with Danni, Sarah, Emma and Beth.
Anyways, thank you for presenting us with such a great read, and I hope to see more from you in the future.
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GREAT job, man. I love this whole series and I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the great work!
This series is just an average story from an average author but the high ratings it gets is insane and undeserving. The number of women falling for one ordinary guy is mind blowing and only a juvenile or someone living a juvenile's fantasy can come up with such a storyline. This series is a lot like Six times a day and a whole bunch of others where one young guy is able to handle a dozen of horny women who are devoted to him and they also just happen to be into each other. How convenient. Stories like this are nothing but cookie-cutter stories where it goes on for many chapters with new and hot women being added continously and the sex is nonestop.
Please don't leave us hanging ... continue with additional chapters ... We are dying to hear as the Family progresses through their lives
great story i hope that they keep coming and cuming for many more parts.
This is a wonderful series. Em is becoming so naughty wondering if Mike ever plans to take the beautifull ass which has or for that matter of all his sisters. It's time when inner voice should becomeore kinky;)
I understand that life happens and all, so this isn't a demand. More of a plea: please, please, please resume writing this series! It's so hot, and kinky, and romantic, and beautiful all at once, and I truly adore it as it's emerged so far. You are a very talented author. <3
Please continue this series it is so erotica and sexy I dont want to stop reading
Great work and I hope to see more, I hope to see a family orgy in the near future!
i read 1-20 one right after the other. I think you have done great on developing the personalities of everyone in the stories. My personal favorite is Emma. I like that Danni is straight and doesn't want to fool around. It adds character. Matt is a great new addition, hope to have more of him and his sister.
Keep up the good works, can't wait till 21 is done.
just read all of your chapters and they're all amazing...best story i've read on here!!!
I don't normally read the long stories. I come here (not a pun) to find a quick read and get horny. Well, I trusted the ratings and began your "long" story. I'm so glad I did. I kept returning until I had finished all 20 chapters. My wife and I had some pretty intense sessions after reading. Yes, she reads on here as well. She's not that much into video porn but she'll read the hell out of a good story. She is at the end of 19 and I won't spoil it for her. The incest storyline took some coaxing but she finally was addicted to it. I'll be watching for another series from you.