by beagle9690
I don't consider a story full of insults and physically harm a romance.
However, my main complaint is regarding the writing style. It is so difficult to comprehend. Agree to an earlier comment - how did this story manage such a high rating.
Why would you shave off a Fire Bush? That's like using A1 on a good steak.
I am really enjoying this story and am very much looking forward to seeing more of it. I’m not convinced that some of the commenters here actually read the same story I did, but that’s their loss. I will admit that it took maybe half a page for me to adjust to the author’s writing style, but after that it was off to the races. My only criticism is that it seems like Jim is a bit like Superman. There just doesn’t seem to be anything he can’t do. But it is fiction, so on with the story, I guess.
How in the world did you get a 4.85 rating? You write like a two year old. I couldn't get past page 1.
Except for the tortuous grammar! An intimacy with Shakespeare's plays does not permit the painful mangling of tense and syntax. Otherwise, an interesting story and still to be continued .5*s.
He is obviously a Saudi prince who is now afraid of what can now happen to him for his past deeds (MBS?). I think this author has the right idea on loving relationships. Having Gina run away from Jim would imply that his intuition was wrong and he loved a bad person. I believe that Jim has the ability to look beyond a person’s outer shell and into the closed hearts. With Gina and Kate, he knows that if he can get below their rough exterior he will find a woman who will give him unconditionally love which can never be broken. This idiot anonymous has no understand of true love and demonstrates this by his 5/28/17 comment.
Really fun story. Sure you need an editor but the bones are vfery good.
I would have gotten rid of the in-depth Gina subplot, i felt it too distracting from the main story. Her just running off or cutting up his heart some other way mightve served the main plot better.
Just no.
You might have had a good idea to start with, but making Kate into a one-dimensional punching bag - no. It also makes the male protagonist into a useless macho pig who doesn't shy back from abusing another person's difficulties for his own profit.
It is far from hot, and definitely not a romance.
Besides, get an editor. The grammatical errors made it really trying to read.
great writing skills , story, look forward to reading the rest of the chapters
There are over 5000 Saudi princes, very few would miss one.
Of course if he were sent home alive with parts missing it could make a good object lesson.
More than one prince would be even better.
Few modern people know that "an eye for an eye" was originally intended to be a measure of mercy.
Well, I loved it! I'm a fan of prolonged foreplay, and edging and the like. This story went on for what seemed to be an eternity. Loved it! So far, the best on Lit.
But Kate's destruction of the wooden box and intrusion into private memories would have cooked her goose with me... I'm not going to read the rest of this series.
This is really a great story premise. Please continue with it. It's a shame to leave it unfinished.
This is a fantastic story! The first half had me laughing during every scene, and the second half was so well-done and endearing. Excellent job!
to write our own plots. I hope Chapter 2 takes us on through the production of "Kiss Me, Kate", their marriage, and their answer to the call of the biological clock - an excellent romance!
Beagle another great story and can't wait for the next chapter. Welcome back and keep up the good work
I very much enjoyed the first installment and am looking forward to the next chapter.