All Comments on 'Kayt takes Phoebe in the Bathroom'

I was going to point out a grammatical error, but then I found several other types of errors, so, it just needs to be proofread.

That one huge paragraph kinda bugged me, but that's just my peeve.

Has potential. I am interested in reading the second part.

I couldn't bring myself to give it 3 stars, so I gave it 2, but I would like to have given it 2 1/2. Seriously, proofread. :)