Kick it up a Notch Ch. 04

Actually while I vehemently disagree with the husband's choices and how he did not divorce Ann, at any of a number of time points, especially, despite the MC showing signs of wiling cuckold behavior, when he got sidelined emotionally Ann being romantically involved with John (which was beyond ridiculous), it was well written. Personally I think willing cuckolding is a mental defect, but at least her after a long time, the husband realized how had been used, how he was marginalized and never given an option besides the obvious one: divorce. So seeing him.work it out and unplug himself from. The marriage, while extremely depressing and making me want to yell at him to grow a spine, again his internal monolog was really well written. Ann is a an execrable, entitled bitch who manipulated her husband, ruthlessly. She could never admit her fault. Even after giving up John. Their open affair was devastating and she exploited her husband being sexually turned on by the threesome sex. His analysis of monogamy and ployamory is dead on. One member cannot raise issues or be upset, while the others just ignore it and hope it goes away. That is not a loving relationship. But she didn't care. It is the reason polyamorous relationships or open marriages of any type have a really high divorce rate of >92%. There are always imbalances or feelings of sexual insecurity or emotional isolation, and only amazing communication and change can fix that. Ann didn't care to do any of that, and John wanted the marriage to fail outright. Ann was a terrible wife on so many levels. She even neglected the kids for several years with her intense open affair. What is sad is that the MC took so long yo realize that he was being held hostage while being abandoned and at the fringe of their marriage. That was depressing. So while I cannot identify with that behavior or deem it remotely acceptable or healthy, it is what the husband chose and again was well written. Like reading the diary of an initially willing cuckold who realizes he made a terrible mistake but chose to isolate himself from his wife as opposed to divorce for socioeconomic reasons (which again I think is a bad choice and spineless), and reading that while sad and depressing, well it showed insight into a damaged mind.

This is just an awfully written story. She makes this bold statement, and the writer launches into TELLING us instead of showing us. He had a dramatic moment where the reader wants to see how this goes down, but he gets literary diarrhea instead. Anyone who knows anything about writing knows that dialogue and conflict are the cornerstones of writing. Are we to presume MC just let the statement go? A one-sentence declaration, and he's mute? As I dug into it, there was too much internal dialogue and insufficient SHOWING. He lost me at the end of part one. Tolstoy and Melville can blather on, and they are barely tolerable. This guy? Nuh-uh.

Good story about a weak man.

A sad story of abnegation and deficient communication. To those geniuses who think this story is unrealistic and ridiculous, just leave your little backyard for a while. You'll see that this kind of story is quite more common than you may think. To the author: I give your story 5 stars, because it is so well written. Many thanks for your writing!

The Sybian would have made good break-point. NOBODY spends $1500-2000 [haven't looked recently] on a sex toy without expecting a LOT of sexual compensation!!

Same with childcare for Ann&John nights!!

"When is John gonna watch the kids while we go somewhere else to fuck?"