by nickles
Great story good start this can go on a long way you must give us some more of this story
You might consider having the girl put a condom on the guy.
It is important that folks who are not ready to get married avoid having babies. I love sex, and sex without condoms is a wonderful feeling, but it makes babies!
Hey I just read your story, and I really thought it was great. Not only was he content great, but it was very well written. The way I judge writing is that I try to picture it in my head...if I get a good picture, it was a good story, if I don't I didn't like it much. I had a very clear picture in my head for yours. Thank you for writing it, you definitely have talent.
This is a awsome story,u really do have some talent.Like the others said please write more stories like that or contenue with that one.
You have to make this into a series. Not only is it amazingly hot and sexy, but now I want to find out what happens in their lives, not just the bedroom (although that's very impressive as well) :)
amazingly tantalizing and erotic. keep writing more,...more....more....plssssssss!
very poorly written did you flunk grade school misspelled words missing words etc. you should be ashamed to say you wrote and posted this trash. it's stories like this that make readers keep saying USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING. delete and do it right or not at all.
Makes me think of a corpse with its eyes wide open. I think you mean subconsciously staring.