All Comments on 'Lake Fun'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Dear Penthouse

Your story reads like a "Dear Penthouse" letter. Make it real dude. Usually its the guy falls asleep, not the girls. Whatever.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
To Fast

you built up a really good story line......then they fucked and went home.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Too inconsistent

Tubing at 50 mph? Limes in martinis? Do a little research.

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