All Comments on 'Laying in Wait Ch. 01'

i love this story as i love all the stories that my Mistress writes. they may scare me but they are well written and thought out. as i was reading the story i could feel pet's terror and pleasure which is the sign of a good writer.

Wonderfully erotic and well written. Thank you for the gift.

The story sucked plain and simple was very poorly written

There was nothing to why he was taken and then why he was returned. It needed an editor but mostly it needed a plot or something to explain why it was happening.

Moved well and was very descriptive. I liked how she went after what she wanted.

Hard to read. Let's work on the grammer and puncuation.

This story sucked so bad its not even worth reading if there is a 2nd chapter which i hope there wont be.

I would love a woman to do that to me lol that really got me turned on so much i came twice as hard as i ever have done in past times .

Needs editing badly, too distracting. Story has too many loopholes.

Needs some editing and proofreading, But the content is Good. Very imaginative...The New York Times calls it

"The best sleazy sex since Bill Clinton" J/K

i am very pleased with how well written and thought out this erotica turned out to be. i find it thrilling and very erotic, truly a fantasy to be sought out for Tthose that have more then just a closed mind. i hope that the other Chapters are just as enjoyable as this one.

cary

and the reason is low on detail and very rushed. Slow down. It wont kill you.

That's where she belonged and that's where he sent her to end this poor story. UGH!

It was a good story but lack a description of anal penetration.