by bellalisashy
That Malcolm is a drunk pig. Lexi is an overmedicated whore. I enjoyed the first 2 chapters. Last 2 are like throwing the story together to make a deadline. Give it up girl. Lost cause. 2 stars
DragonRider55
Have you ever have sex before? He came 8 times in one morning?? Cumming 10 times a day? He has to lubricate her yet she is cumming? And he's an alcoholic. Most alcoholics have a hard time getting and keeping it up once never mind multiple times daily everyday. Please write what you know. It may make a good story. This one is horrible.
Thank you for the compliment. I can hardly write it without getting hot. Hey, it's my effd up fantasy.
Thank you for the feedback. I am writing what I fantasize about. It really doesn't have to be 100% truthful to be enjoyable, does it? After all, most of us are here for a fantasy escape, right? I know I'd be happy to be fucked by my father in secret up to 10 times a day. Wouldn't you? Otherwise you wouldn't be reading this fantasy trash.
That Malcolm is, indeed, a drunk pig. Lexi is, indeed, an over-medicated whore. It's my fantasy and I'm sticking to it.
I respect the point you made about trying to quickly tie things up. You're right. I'll take my time with Chapter 5.