All Comments on 'Little Girl'

What a horrible story. Because of the bad grammar I would normally suggest an editor but in this case I would strongly advise you to not submit any more stories.

You need to find yourself a proof reader or an editor so that your work doe snot appear to be so badly next time.

Otherwise just OK. 2 stars. But you can reach 5 stars if you will as for help. I learned the hard way that one cannot ever proof or edit their own work.