by PaddleTeacher
Having read all the chapters up to and including this one I'd just like to say good job on writing such a cute age play story, it's the first time I've seen an attempt at a younger age play bracket on the site and I'm thoroughly enjoying it. The littles are portrayed very sweetly and are lovely to read about.
Keep up the good work and don't let the critics get you down :)
5/5 stars
"As soon as they had entered the house she dropped to her knees." (Regarding Sara and Chris returning home). Then it says "Thank you Daddy!" Sara slowly got up, fixed her dress, wiped her mouth and looked at Chris.
Chris smiled and they made their way into the house.
Don't mean to be picky but these kinds of details stick out to me as I'm sure they do to many others.