All Comments on 'Living with the Lie'

One of your worst stories. But I'm not surprised. I'm thinking you're a pretty selfish guy. After all you told us about your summer trips with your poor wife in YOUR mustangs. Kinda self serving are we?

Well actually it was really a great story I like the story all the way to the end. I usually only like short stories 3 Pages no more than five. So don't be discouraged you ask people to leave a comment you want to know how good it was to see if you're getting better...... Stop fronting it's not hard to tell that you or a very good writer you just want to hear people tell you you have a superb penmanship skilled with Bring stories to life in well descriptive paragraphs..... there you go now take a bow

Too many words. Many useless. Otherwise ok.

Hoping to read a follow up story

Personally, I'd call this your best so far. An end that is somewhat tragic but real.

More complex than the usual literotica stories of 'wife cheats then tossed and miraculous new love appears'.

I liked this a lot.

A very refreshing story and so different than I ones I normally read on Literotica. It was a very intriging web of deceit from four very interesting characters but you managed to spin it together so that it ended with a nice positive glow. Well done, I really enjoyed it.

And like someone else said, one of SS06’s better ones. It’s funny that “Small Town” America has somehow gotten the reputation as a nice wholesome place, when in truth, many of those little towns are like “Peyton Place”, little dens of sin and iniquity. And it’s usually the people who grew up there who are most aware of it. It’s “Mayberry USA” that’s the real fiction. Good story, Stangster.

Please continue to write like this. I have read several of your stories, and they are all well done. LOVED IT. 10 stars. ( I can't count . ) The Bear approves.

The BEAR

need to keep track of the names

Six page story told in thirteen ,nuff said.

I wish every author was this good at not sticking the landings. This one ended in the perfect spot where the reader can spend an hour or two after imagining how it all implodes or doesn't for the characters. I'm off to bed after this comment. I know I'll be doing just that over my three cups of wake up coffee tonight. Thanks for that, Stang. You are a Lit master.

But seriously, it really did need some better editing.

next time, re-read the story. Determine who is really dean and who is gerry (or is it jerry). I ignored it the first time, but i'm not done yet and you got confused again. It seems like a good story, all you need is to get your people straight.

StangStar06 finished this story in storiesonline.net.

IDIOT! I quit reading this on the third page. You can't keep ANYTHING straight. You have Gerry cussing out Gerry, etc...

outta here

I can’t believe Gerry fucked her.

Ruined the whole story for me&

& it wasn’t an important part of the story.

Bill

The blackmail was weird. Why would the blackmailer assume that Miranda hadn't told Gerry about meeting with Dean? Also, why bring in 3 other guys?

Outstanding story, well told and held my attention in a tight written grasp.

A great story well written, the end could have been expanded so that both liars were suitably dealt with and the lovers ended together. Just my Disney type of fantasy finish. One of your best.

Great story and beautiful ending. One of your best story. Definitely a five star rating 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

With so much lying, this is all going to end in tears later.

Very good story. Will there be a sequel? I hope so!

There are a few technical errors in spelling that would improve readability. However, the story is written well enough to keep you reading without dwelling on the typographical errors. This "what if?" tale really opens a can of worms into the lives the main characters, primarily Gerry and Laci. Dean is a quintessential Jerk, yes with a capital "J"! Obviously he is a narcissistic and manipulative Jackass (note appropriate capitalization). Dean is at the center of this comedy of errors because he is the root cause for how things turned out for G and L. His Jealousy (seeing the pattern?) of Gerry became the foundation for all the heartache in Gerry, Laci and recently, Miranda's lives. But that does not make the other three perfect. Gerry and Laci now have their own secrets and Miranda has not been entirely truthful with Gerry. So even the "heros" are tinted with a patina of secrets, lies and guilt. Kind of like real life, huh?! - TANSTAAFL

Since everyone knows everyone in Stupidtown (and all their business too) I can’t help wondering how word hasn’t gotten around that Dino doesn’t fuck worth a damn.

I did not feel their were any hero's in this story . Just a bunch of liars and cheaters . 5 Stars

Haha loved it; Life is complicated. Our human morals & principles are constantly tested and age & circumstances can change that. Love is complicated. Fun 5 star story

Very creative and well told. There were problems though, at one point you started calling Dean by Gerrys name for several lines. The story was enjoyable though im not one for long detailed sex writing. You did a good job and im glad i read it.

All four of these clowns are equally fucked up. Nice story.

Nice, but way too transparent. An alternative ending, say, from about pg 6, without looking, could fix 90% of that.

Should have Gerry and Miranda confess totally. The have Lacy divorce Dean and move in with Gerry and Amanda. Gerry can raise the child as his own. Miranda can be the step mom/Aunty. Or have dead killed by a drunk driver. You figure.it out. Not a bad story. But Dean is a worthless piece of a bit treating Lacy like that. She should have cut his balls off and had the bronzed in a showcase.

Really enjoyed it. But i feel the ending could have been ahhhhh more.

Enjoyed the story, but it didn’t feel finished.

You started off so good but ruined it by making both walk on their principles and becoming nothing more than cheaters.

Shame. Great story ruined by a shit turn.

Win, win, win sad.

When Miranda tells Laci they need to talk because Dean's dick isn't anywhere close to normal sized that was a great opening for Laci to make an off handed comment about Dean having a small dick and Gerry having a big dick. Nothing obvious that anyone picks up on right away.

Something that as Miranda thinks on it she realizes the truth about what happened between Gerry and Laci during their days away. Then with them being friends and hanging out together she sees the looks that are exchanged. When the baby is born Miranda notices she looks like Gerry.

When she finally tells him that she can't have babies she tells him if he wants more kids he can always get Laci pregnant again.

Laci divorces Dean. Moves in with Gerry and Miranda. Presto... Happily ever after

Good story but overall really depressing

Why was it necessary to stretch this crap to thirteen pages when half a dozen,would have sufficed.?

Dean deserved to be cuckoled as he's a total shitheel! Too bad Gerry couldn't keep both women.

Ditto, miket0422!

Where is the second version?

We kind of liked the story, but it really dragged on longer than it really needed too. However, the ending is really pathetic and very disappointing at best.

Frankly and honestly, the ending blew the entire story.

Is there a second version?

Must be hidden quite well, just like a "could be" really good ending of this version!

There is a contradiction between the characters needing to be honest, yet holding onto a lie.

13 pages of cheating whoring skanks!!

Garbage reading

I like the description miket0422 wrote below. It would be a better ending.

4 Stars on a good story . My current wife cannot have children either . But I did have a Daughter with my first wife , she is now 18 and gets along with my current wife really well .., Sadly My daughter and I do not see Eye to Eye on most of anything .

Unusually for one of SS06’s stories this one feels unfinished and unsatisfactory.

Honestly, Miranda had a complex and lied by omission with her insecurities and her paranoia, but of the four characters she is the lest reprehensible. And while Laci doesn't care, Gerry, the "supposedly" nice guy has to live with that. Felt bad for Miranda.

I read the completed version over on stories online. Was a big disappointment. Miranda never learns the truth, that Laci's daughter is Gerry's. Distraught at seeing Gerry, who is clueless that the young girl is his daughter after 7 years (still thinking it is Dean's because Laci told no one), dance with Laci's daughter and bemoaning that she cannot give Gerry a child, and Laci still refusing to confess the truth, which would have actually made Miranda happy that Gerry had a child, she dashes out of a school auditorium and is killed in the street by a texting driver. Gerry is enraged at the murderer and terribly depressed about Miranda's death.

But hey it all ends grest for Laci because she starts a divorce action on Dean (for multiple legitimate reasons, including that Dean's cheating that fateful day indirectly set off a chain of events that led to Miranda's death, someone she after 7 years regarded as a best friend and sister), she tells Gerry he is the father (because he is clueless) and the two of them live happily together with their daughter and have more kids while Miranda's corpse is rotting in a grave.

Somehow, Miranda, the person who was the most sympathetic, despite her insecurities and worries about Gerry, and was a true loving wife to Gerry and became really close as a sister to Laci during her struggles with Dean, ends up dead, clearing a path for Gerry and Laci.

So the two cheaters find paradise on Earth and Miranda is rewarded for death through no fault of her own. Seemed a cowardly way to end the story. Very disappointing. Fridge Miranda so there is room for Gerry and Laci. Uggh.

Yeah I also read the completed story online. Just sucked the wind out of the sails. Miranda gets fridged, so Laci and Gerry can be together. Not sure why commenters are bashing Miranda so much. Of the four main characters, while she has issues and is infertile, she is the least deplorable of the four and unlike the other three did nothing seriously wrong, except lie by omission. She would have been OK with leraning the truth because she loves Gerry that much. But nope. Laci has to have her man. So Miranda gets killed in a vehicle accident. Was nauseating to read after so many pages. Gah!

Read the completed version. Author did a terrible disservice to Miranda. If needed to fridge someone, then kill off Laci and have Dean have a breakdown or something, such that Gerry and Miranda adopt. Besides DNA would title in their favor is Dean was declared unfit. Would.win out over extended family.

Miranda deserves better. End of story, such a vile mc, the author portrays him to be a good saint no fucking way, Miranda had the right to be jealous and telling him off to the mc when Laci was clinging him at the start. What did the mc say? She embarrassed him? Wtf? If the roles were reversed what would the mc feel. He married a good woman, sure she's jealous because she knows the mc history with his rival and his wife, so she has the right to be, and what did the mc say? She embarrassed him? Wtf really? He didn't love her at all.if he truly did, he would have talked straight to Laci that they shouldn't be close and just settle for being acquaintance he absolutely did nothing, and he went off ignoring her when they talked about his rival. Yeah a mc douche. This is one of those stories where I would like to see the mc broken leaving in poverty.

Miranda is the only one there who truly deserves to be happy. I'm sorry for her

The solution is simple: polygamy. Gerry has my permission to have both Laci and Miranda! 🤣

This story is really good and I'm glad it ended here when it did because I've seen the longer version of this story and I would probably want to nut punch Stang for what he did to Miranda. 5/5

Dean is a major league asshole and deserves everything he gets, however the other three MC's are just regular people that are doing the best they can in difficult situations, I do not blame Laci and Gerry for lying about what they did because they were two very hurt and emotional people when they did it and really why would they think their marriages would continue? Gerry loves two women and he is trying to do the right thing by the woman he married by not doing anything with Laci again. Yeah it is not great that he didn't tell Miranda about that weekend, but there are no good or easy answers for how to deal with that situation so he is loving her the best he can and is doing everything he can do to help her be happy including helping her keep her friendship with Laci alive. Laci is really suffering because she knows that her husband is a POS and she has a pretty good idea that if Gerry and Miranda's marriage were to blow up she would probably end up with Gerry especially if he knew that her little girl was his as well and you can tell that she really loves Gerry and would be very happy if they could be together. However, she knows that Gerry really does love his wife and it would hurt him to hurt her and the fact that Miranda is her friend and she knows that she would be crushed if she lost him that she is giving up her happiness for theirs. It is not great but it is pretty brave as well. Now Miranda anyone who would really have a problem with what had happened to her before she moved to town or how she went after Gerry is probably a bit of a POS themselves so forget about that, however lying about being able to get pregnant when she knows that Gerry really wants kids is pretty cruel so I wouldn't put her in for sainthood just yet. Of course it would be great if they could form a throuple but that is just not how the world really works so I'm glad the story didn't go there. Thanks for the story I liked it.

Had to stop mid-story when she woke up in Canada! You can't sleep crossing the border. Even in the 60s-90s when I was doing that you couldn't sleep crossing the border either way. We used to have to go into Canada just to go to the Drive In movie, so got pretty used to it.

Como dice Miranda, en un tiempo no muy lejano, irán al medico y verán que Miranda no puede embarazarse desde tiempo atrás y, la solución final está en el vientre de Laci, que incluso será propuesto por la misma Miranda y.....Felices los cuatro, incluso los lectores.

That’s a whole lot of small town trailer trash going on right there…

Wow. Imagine having to keep secrets like that? Thanks for sharing that 5 star creation!

I don't see the point in lying just to stay with a hoe?! At least Dean is a cuck now