by caprine
You have a couple of problems with anachronisms here. There were no home pregnancy tests in 1958 and no sonograms.
I, too, caught the "remove thong then remove panties" little discrepancy, but otherwise a fairly erotic story. Not one of your best, but still pretty good. I prefer the second ending.
Delicious, cock-hardening story. I like the first ending, and could we have another chapter, please, perhaps of how you and Randy get married but get into partner swapping? (Incidentally, one technical criticism: Fred rips off your thong, but in the next paragraph he pulls down your panties. Needs tidying up?)
I judge stories by the way they take me into them, so that I can't stop reading them, whilst the words of the author create a movie of the proceedings in my mind.
This is an erotic story site, your story was very erotic; my cock seconds that opinion.
Thank you, and please keep using your talent to arouse and entertain all of us readers and writers on this site.