All Comments on 'London Fog Ch. 01'

Interisting start but too short for introduction

I’m loving the premise of the story, a very good start! Some critiques though, her random horniess is kinda unrealistic, and I think she should be more strong willed and fight back more with her master. It will make it more interesting. Would love a more darker look for this story. But overall, very interesting start. Can’t wait for the next chapter!!

I did not realize how short it would be!! Now I have an idea about what a page is! Thanks for the feedback and I will get the next chapter finished!

Between the random horniness, the comments that don't make any sense and the fact that she is rich enough to run away and live alone and have fancy massages but not rich enough to hide for real...

It sounds like something you threw together while jacking it.

Don't bother with chapter two until you get a shower and an editor.

Good start I havent read the second chapter yet but it seem interesting I personally like dark non-con so I think if you do take the above suggestion then it would suit my tastes.

@Anonymous damn calm down, this writer is just starting this story.

Like seriously don’t let this person bug you. Especially someone who leaves a mean anonymous comment.