by Yeswayted69
This is actually a nicely told tale so far. The fact that each installment is so short seems to work---so far. The dialogue flows; the story is interesting! This reader is looking forward to the next chapter.
Don't worry what some may say,keep going just the way you are,it's getting to be very intresting they way you are writing it.IF THEY DON'T LIKE THEY DON'T NEED TO READ IT.....
This is simple, innocent and sexy. I love everyone and all that is going on. Take it all and weave it into a fine, sexy soap opera that can last a long time. You'll have plenty of happy readers.