All Comments on 'Lost in the Mall'

00-VERY scary. To think someone, anyone would put this fetish/BDSM story on this site. Black on White CAN be erotic this is not even close.

I don't quite know what to think. I'm torn b/c b4 the 1st nut I was into it, but post nut I was just interested. Then the ending was kinda sad. You know which ending I was hoping for. NEways, nice story :)

it was good at first...then just got plain stupid

It started out really good, then went off track. The whole slave thing really blew it. Try writing a more erotic ending - maybe she tries to figure out how to tell her husband when he gets home. Then discovers she's pregnant. Who's baby is it? etc.

Look there is also La perla, Rigby and Pellar, Lejaby, etc. etc. Some far more exotic and erotic than dear old Victoria. As soon as I read that line re Dan's purchase I switched off, as did my partner. The secret needed to be about being original. Secrets is more Anne Summers than La Perla, i.e. scratchy lace not sensual filligree. Other than that, a competent story, thanks.

Who is that stupid? You should have ended it after a quick screw in the back of the Escalade.

Beginning was great then it went down hill rather quickly. Try making the story more realistic next time

you right like shit, terrible story....