All Comments on 'Love in a Month Ch. 01'

Amazing story. I like how he is very dominant, and that she doesn't give in so quickly; my type of reluctance story lol. I hope this story has plenty of chapters to it.

You really need to work on your writing skills. It was painful editing this mentally while reading. Some of your sentences don't make sense. Your story line is not original and lacks background. Badly. I'm so tired of this whole rich guy/kidnapping/abuse/magic cock stupidity. Who would react like that in real life? A guy who needs to abduct and brutalize random girls to get it up is a sick criminal, not a dream hero. But of course the fact that he is sooo rich and soooo handsome and hung like a horse makes him worthy of forgiveness. Sorry, suspension of disbelief can only work so far. Might be ok for underage readers, they don't know any better, they are the lost 50 shades generation. Your readers want characters they can identify with, that's the purpose of romance/erotica. I could never imagine myself in the skin of this stupid girl. Try again.

Hey everybody. Thank you for reading and commenting. It's my first story ever so yes there might be some/a lot mistakes but I will definitely work harder and try to improve my writing in the upcoming chapters. Hope you guys like it. Positive feedback always appreciated. Hope you guys will enjoy reading the next one. XO

Your story infuriated me. I understand she identified with her captor for a while, but when free she should have immediately turned on him, in my mind. I wanted only revenge after this heartbreaking rape and kidnap. Immaterial that she may have enjoyed the act. That is kind of out of her control.

@grabmyballs

You know right how most of the rapes go uninformed to the police let alone from an eighteen year old who has just shifted to a new city and starting her life. Maybe she wanted to inform but maybe she was scared. Check out the next chapter for the real deal.

XO

good story and I do like that she doesn't give in totally

Thank you so much. I have updated the second chapter of this series. Hopefully you will like it too. XO

DIE YOU PIECE OF MANURE

I’m not gonna talk about your writing. I know this is your first story. However, you have to know about what you’re writing about to some extent. Have you ever seen sex in the city? Most people in New York do not have cars, not even wealthy people in New York have cars. So a poor college student with a car is completely unrealistic. Being on the 20th floor is (not a skyscraper) The windows would not open. It’s possible to have a balcony but not a window that was opens because that’s illegal. Fact checking is pretty essential