All Comments on 'Love Potion'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Pure Bliss

Excellent!!! this story could have been about any two longlost lovers & still would have had passion & been wonderous! Perhaps, you should consider extending the original story into a three or more pages mini novel? Considering the sister's point of view perhaps; thus introducing a new twist to the trist?

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Delicious and delightful

What a cute story and so very different . I do hope you continue with them .

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Once was great--To add to it would diminish it

Quit while you are winning

badgirl1972badgirl1972almost 16 years ago
HOT!

There has got to be more! Please tell me this is only the beginning!!!!

oldwayneoldwaynealmost 16 years ago
Short but sweet!

Excellent little tale! Thanks so much for sharing it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
good but

good but needs a second chapter to tell what happens now that he knows about the potion and do the parents find out if so what do they say does she get pregnant fill uis in soon

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
no lock?

what no lock on the door what guy with a sister doesn't have a lock on his bedroom door and doesn't keep it locked all the time keep it believable please

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago

make sequals to this story

sexydad50sexydad50about 13 years ago
very sweet

This could have been a story for several categories. Very sweet and sensual, and erotic. Could have drawn it out a little more to increase the tension, but nicely done! More!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
usual

as usual here we only get a third of the story no begining and no end just the middle which is way to rushed. if you had written a chapter giving background on the relationship between them before this and a chapter telling what happens after this it would be good.as is this fails big time either do it right and completly or not at all. you wasted your time, our time and the sites space. real shame it could have been a real good story if done PROPERLY.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Fucking Rubbish...

Premise is ridiculous, no attempt to tell a story, no back story to speak of, just 'I wanted to fuck my sister, I did, I came, it was great, The End'. Absolutely no stars, ever........

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