All Comments on 'Love, Sex, and Deceit'

Edit. Edit. Edit.

You wrote about and included text for a student in a writing class. And you definitely need to improve your writing skills and obtain an editor. Keep writing.

right?

Or did you forget page 3? PLEASE get an editor, or at least proofread several times before posting. The number of errors took away from the storyline.

Loved the story and hope there's more to come.

This story has a good understructure, but it reads as if it were put together using voice-to-text, then not proofread. The author should take advantage of the proofreading assistance offered by this site.

This is the first time I have ever made this comment. Tonerboner you badly need an editor and a proof reader. Your mistakes almost destroyed your story for the reader.

The story is very good BUT WHY? don't you continue with the story!!!