All Comments on 'Lucky Day'

If English is not your first language, then please take time to read decent English texts. Note the construction of sentences, appropriate word usage and punctuation. When you rewrite this, I might find it an easier read myself.

Devir Ginator

Thanks for writing, but it needs context. Who are they? Why is "she" doing it?

Appalling spelling, grammar and structure ruins any possible merit of this tale. Totally without structure or context. Sad!

Maybe it would have been readable if you had written in your own language and then used Google Translate. Oh, um, perhaps that was what you did? Unreadable. One star.

Insin:

You show considerable talent for writing. Thank you for sharing this effort with our little group.

Just because English is not your native tongue is no reason not to express your ideas in writing. Unfortunately, most on-line translators like Google and Babblefish translate literally (word for word) without any consideration of grammatical errors. Some words don't translate well. or at all. from one language to another, especially slang terms. All that can make following your storyline written a task, and not every reader wants to go through the effort to mentally search for your meaning and rewrite your story in their mind. Basically, they're not trying to be rude - just lazy, and too used to being spoon-fed perfect English.

Let me suggest that you consider asking one of the Literotica authors whose works you admire and respect to act as a proofreader/editor for you. Extra points if they are bi-lingual and capable of translating for you as well. More likely, you'll have to use an on-line translator and your proofreader can make grammar and verb tense corrections for you from that.

Keep writing.

NWRaptor

As everyone figured English is not my first language. I will work on my language better on future submissions. It's my first time so thank you guys for the feed back. I really appreciate the support and suggestions everyone's given.

about it's volunteer editor service. I believe it's free. Go to Literotica home page and follow the directions from there. That will tell you how to find a proof reader or editor. I liked what you wrote and am sure it could be better with some help. Best wishes from the U.K.

m222rjr.

The problem with any language is that, even if one reads and writes perfectly, it is still very difficult to create a gripping erotic story. It has got to do with the right descriptions, pauses, twists. It has got to do with being either minimalist or detailed, depending on the topic and situation. Describing sex without being boring, repetitive, sterile or overly detailed is very difficult indeed. Many people who master their own language perfectly couldn't do it without a lot of practice.