by wiccanluvr1988
You have a great way of making the story flow (among other things ;>) Keep up the good work. You definitely have talent! I can't wait to read more! Write faster!
Great start...keep up the good work and am looking forward to seeing where your story goes...
I do believe there is great hope for you. You gave enough detail to allow me to "see" your story, but not so much you bored me. I enjoy "non-human" stories alot and I do hope you continue this story. Maybe 1 or two more submissions with this one and then move on. I don't think this will be one you can stretch out for to many chapters. Best of luck!! I will be watching for more.