All Comments on 'Lustful Energy Ep. 01'

Not bad for a first story .Looks like you barrowed from others for your story line but put your own spin on it . You may want to work on that .Thanks for the story and Keep writing .....

Excellent start and potential for many chapters. Please keep it going and don't drop it like many others do.

I'd only suggest you find an editor.

'...he could see every ounce of pleasurable spots...' In my universe spots are marks, in yours they have mass. Odd at best.

Thanks for sharing! I hope you continue for decades; the Internet needs more interesting content and you are well into the 'interesting' qualification.

JP

I've learned a lot since finishing this story and have become a much more confident writer. I'm planning on going back through this entire story, from episode one to the conclusion, and editing them. For now I have too many other stories I'm working on to be able to stop and go this far back. Thank you for your critiques, both positive and negative. It always helps me grow my craft.