All Comments on 'Mall Conquest'

Loved it ..... please write the a part 2.

Great story - there should definitely be a sequel! You are one of the few writers who seems to have an actual hold on the underlying subject!

I always love all of your stories, thanks for getting me wet night after night!

He seems to bring pleasure to everyone. We need more men like him.

it had me hard the hole time

don't we all just want to be like mike

Here's a hint...learn some adjectives. Then, work on story structure and, perhaps a foreign concept, believability.

My pussy's wet and my nipples are sore!

More stories, PLEASE!

3 inch diameter????? Now a 3 inch circumference would be small, but diameter is really large. That is like the size of the bottle of run in my booze cabinet. Never saw one that big, except in some doctored photos. Interesting touch though, having a son walk in and participate.

Imperfections and changes of pacing can have significant impact on how a story reads. I am not an expert.

But this story does a bad job of conveying feelings or making the reader feel present.

good story, except Jason was a random event and didn't add anything