by EleanaMonteago
Don't you think it would be a little uncomfortable (not to mention unsexy) to wear a brazier?
Interesting story, but truly incomplete at this point.
Mystery and misdirection in stories are fine. But unless you plan a sequel, and then this story should be, "ch. 1," you left too many open plot holes: why did she want sex with a possible stranger so quickly as a 3 week bride, when she easily could have asked him a question to hear his voice? Why was the session so abruptly ended with a horn? Why the elaborate costumes for only a very few minutes? Why an armored car? etc.
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Rambling?
Incomplete is the grade I'd give -- duo starro.
What happened at the end? Was it a police raid? And it felt like she gave in to lust far too easily for a recently married woman.
maybe a bit questionable as to where the end is but i feel it all plays along with the mysterious theme
What is it with this men in this stories. Seems they´re not happy unless somebody else is getting in their wifeś. Also what about the women ? Don´t they know the word No!!? Or asking? before procedding? Hope you have something better than this.