All Comments on 'Marie the Goth: High School Pt. 01'

Umm. Yea

Lost me at the end...

It seems pretty clear that your writing is not super high quality. I don't mean to be a dick about it, but that's the simple truth and somebody has to tell you. I do hope you improve, though. Start out by trying to imitate other stories here and get a feel for how they're written. Don't give up!

And i'm waiting for part 2

You said she wasn't using a urinal with her fat cock....but she was in the girls bathroom so there shouldn't be a urinal anywhere so it shouldn't even come into the story....

It was a futanari bathroom numb-nuts.

Unless your HyperDan from hentai foundry this isn't your story to begin with ill be letting him know about this.

i wish i was cindy