All Comments on 'Married Morning without Kids'

I'm not a woman, fool. Second person only works if you're Swinger Joe and don't know the difference.

But pointless recitation of a fuck session. Should have been in Erotic Couplings, since that was the focus, rather than the marriage. Great marriage sex, but that alone does not make it a Loving Wives story. Thanks for depicting what a true loving marriage looks like when having sex.

First of all, it's hard for a seasoned professional writer to be able to pull it.

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More importantly, people really, really, really hate it.

Pathetic plot.

Wrong category. As someone else said erotic (or romantic). 1*

So writing in the second person just turned me off the story.

He better wake up and smell the coffee (pussy) or she'll be looking elsewhere to get her jollies. She has visually and physically given notice notice to her needs and he needs to set aside his Sat schedule and revise it to include play time esp. with NO kids in the house.

Take a writing class. This is way over-written. Makes me think of a guy who spends much of his time in the gym, admiring himself, thinking what a hunk he is. No one

else really matters to him.