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by Suicidecrusader

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oodsphereoodsphereover 12 years ago

Good start, I'd like to see more

emgizzyemgizzyabout 12 years ago
Please, seek out an editor.

I barely got through the first couple paragraphs and already I've seen 'your' in place of 'you're' and 'where' in place of 'we're'. your story has potential, but is in dire need of an editor. Spell-check is not an editor.

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