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by urbane500

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Ooph!

You might consider getting an editor. The very first sentence is convoluted and hard to read. The second sentence is punctuated incorrectly, to an embarrassing degree. The dialogue is stilted and clunky. I couldn't finish it. Keep working at writing, though.

chytownchytownabout 10 years ago
Thanks***

For sharing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Neighbours

Author needs a lesson in grammar.

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