by maskedstranger
Loved your story, told us as much as necessary about all the characters, their motivations and who cares about their family history? Got directly to the point and I hope you'll write a lot more!
The theme is erotic, and loved the story... caught up in the moment
and HOT! The anonymous fuck is always a delight, and your description was right on.
You did a great job for a first time. Nice tempo and descriptions. Keep up the good work, you have a lot of talent. I look forward to reading more.