All Comments on 'Merry Christmas'

Well written with a new theme. I could picture the whole event as it was written so well. I would have like more sex with the girl, but I enjoy what I get. I hope you write more stories.

Not bad at all.

I do not like rape stories, but this one was a little different.

Awesome. Very naughty. Such a turn on from any character's viewpoint.

Rape is rape no matter how much you window dress it.

Very erotic story and a fantastic job of writing.

The best thing about fiction and writing is you can create any scenario and have your characters do things that are illegal, immoral, and illicit without any consequences.

Too bad more people don’t channel their actions through writing. Bravo!

I know that what's depicted here is rape. In real life this would be wrong, and I think my readers know that. Nobody gets hurt by fantasizing about it, though.

I'm glad you liked the story.

Ibthink it's a great concept but I think it could've been better executed. I think using the point of view you used was too limiting. Making it an omniscient narrator could have given several points of view and you could play around with it more. I would've liked to know what was he thinking while going through it and I think adding Melissa's torment of the horror of waking up in a different place, woth a sore body and no recollection of what happened adds another dimension. It was a great concept but was too one dimensional

Thanks for the feedback.

I feel like any POV is a tradeoff; the more you focus on one character, the more complete a picture you get of their perspective, but the less you see of everyone else's. I wanted this story to be very centered on Ellie's experience, but I'll certainly experiment more with other points of view in future stories.

Well done!

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.

Would love a second chapter, endless possibilities.

You start off with her realizing her keys are missing. Presumably stolen so someone could gain entry. Not even a paragraph later she hears a noise and goes to investigate it with her keys in hand. . .what???

It's a Christmas miracle! Or it's a continuity error. Your pick.

Liked the flow and that was really good. More like this please.

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.

When Ellie took Melissa's bra off, I could see where this was going.

What a fantastic twist to the usual Non-Consent/Reluctance stories, Ellie egging him on added a frisson and kept me hard and breathless to the final words.

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I do tend to like stories that run in that same vein.

I was on my way to read 'class project' and just had to revisit this wonderful story!

Such a good story idea, Ellie is a great girl and James is a lucky guy!

Thanks! I am glad you're a fan.

Loved the story but would love to see it continue with Melissa having to move in with Ellie and James.

Anon,

I'm glad you liked the story.

It'd be interesting to see what happened if Melissa moved in with Ellie and James. I wonder if she'd figure it out, and how she'd feel about it if she did. I can't promise that I'll follow up on this story but I'll think about it.

I would love a follow up where they took Melissa in and accepted her and the baby as their own and trying to keep her babys origin a secret

Vegetablemash,

That's an interesting idea. I can't promise that I'll follow up on this story, but I'll bear that idea in mind if I do.

I'm doing wet omg thank you for writing this

MissSummerSkye,

I am very glad you're enjoying the story.

god, this had me so wet and turned me on so much!! anazing job from you, and an amazing time from me ;)

Anon,

I'm very glad you enjoyed it.

Wow! Such a great story. I thought the storyline was good. I would have like to seen a little more about how Melissa felt to James or maybe exploring her inside. Well done.

Anon,

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. This story was a lot more centered on Ellie's point of view, so there were some things she couldn't know directly. Focusing closely on one character's point of view always has its drawbacks, but sometimes not knowing everything can be exciting in a way that an omniscient point of view isn't.

Thank you for reading.

Absolutely loved it!

I am defenseless against impregnation fantasies, and stories with wives who give their husbands girls to fuck. Putting them together is 200-proof.

If some budding pornographer asks you for the rights to film this scene, I beg you to sign the agreement!

Insofar as the perspective debate is concerned, I would find first-person in Ellie's voice the next plus ultra of erotica, but that's just my kink. I have very, um, fond memories of some of the scenes my wife described to me when we played.

UtilityCurve,

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. If someone ever does want to film any of my stories, I'd probably be down for that.

I do enjoy playing with different perspectives, and I've experimented with a variety of first- and third-person stories. A bunch of my stories are first-person from the woman's perspective, including the Class Project series which also involves a woman helping her partner ravish other women, so hopefully you'd enjoy some of them too.

This is so wrong, and so unethical, and sooooo hot. It is definitely in the realm of things that should be left for consensual fantasies, but wow is it a hot fantasy. Nicely written!

Shadracht,

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I definitely agree with you - it'd be wrong in reality, but it's delicious in fantasy.