All Comments on 'Mistress Marla Shares Her Slut'

This story was hot. I love the idea of a slave being forced to torture and humiliate herself for the pleasure of others. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.

Nice story. Builds up tension. One would like to see what follows. Please carry on!

The story idea is fine enough, but you rush it quite badly. You just say what she is doing when putting on or taking off all the pins etc. but that's it. There should be description with those actions. As comparison your story is like a picture of a stick-man compared to a full detailed portrait. Fill in the details of what is happening and your story becomes better instantly.