All Comments on 'Mobility Ch. 02'

by TheKeith

Sort by:
  • 3 Comments
acupacupalmost 6 years ago
Good Story

One nit pick, it's areola, not aureola.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
This has the potential

to be a great series! You could have put all 3 chapters in one rather than breaking it down like you did- but it still works. Remember; on Literotica when you break chapters it throws off the train of thought for the readers. A good cutoff is about 12 to 15 pages; less than that is OK, beyond that it gets tedious.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Thanks for sharing...

This has great potential, Maybe one of the the greats, I’m really looking forward to the next chapter...thanks again.

Anonymous
Our Comments Policy is available in the Lit FAQ
Post as:
Anonymous