All Comments on 'Mom's Naughty Workout'

I sense there could be a sequel. Hope so. Five stars.

More please sequellll

You need to have a longer story line.... A very good start!

Really enjoyed the story line. Well qritten. Maybe word/tense choice or two; but really a well written, interest keeping story, Thank You.

You have a lot you can do with this one. I really doubt anyone would go to the point you describe and not go all the way. I think this in as believable as "I'll only put it in just an inch or two." That only happens if he only has an inch or two.

liked it very much looking forward to read more from you only thing I didn't care for it was too short

I hope this is just chapter one and not a one off story.

when will we be able to read the rest of the story?

Is there going to be more to this story?

I want to read more of their vacation.

Thanks for the read

Really great story, hoping there will be other chapters to this!

It's a shame :\ this could have been a few chapters long, really good build up story about working out, just wish it hadn't got intimate so fast.

nice build up but ended too soon

I wish you would write longer stories, or at least continue them. Lots of teasing build-up with no satisfactory conclusion at the end of the story. This particular story was all foreplay, no fucking.

On a technical note, you switched from past tense to present tense at this paragraph:

"No baby. We can't." She said as she leans even closer so that her nipples brush my chest. She begins kissing my neck. I can feel tell that she is getting close.

Then back to past tense at:

"Oh baby, fuck!" It was the first time I had ever heard my mom curse and it was the hottest time I had ever heard that word spoken....

Pick a tense and stick to it throughout. Past tense is usually better than present tense.

You need to write more. Obviously he should be full fucking his mom after the workouts... Mutual masturbation is a good start, but shouldn't be the end...

but was there some underlying attraction between mother and son that led to their affair?

Mom: "Your father doesn't think I'm attractive."

Son: "I do."

Stage direction: Characters proceed to sex.

Ch. 2?

Really great story... Part 2, please?

Why stop at the almost best part

With the potential for more. Maybe next time, consider drawing out the tease and the chase a little longer. The teasing can be as erotic as the final consummation. This was great, but it rushed a little too quickly from innocent photography, to mutual masturbation. It seemed like mere minutes from start to finish. Sometimes a longer wait, a longer tease, can be more satisfying, to the characters and reader alike.

Part 2 a must!

That was a fun read, and very erotic.

This is a fantastic, romantic, intimate love story between mother and son. The passion, emotional intimacy, sensual chemistry between mother and son is logical and believable. This is the way I picture an incestuous love affair between mother and son would begin. I hope someday the author further develops this story line.