by black_moth
I liked the story. Also maybe take it down a notch people, a couple of mistakes are not the end of the world.
I would have rated 5 stars if it were longer....reached a conclusion.
Well written, good substance.
for what it is its better written and told better than most the stories lately. that aside i hope you continue the story and dont let the assholes get you down. i do recommend that you either have your stories proof read or get a volunteer editor to help you clean it up. there were'nt many errors, but there were some.
It would have served the asshole right if she had bitten his cock off. I wonder how he'd like someone to jam a garden hose down his throat and then turn on the water?? He'd probably whine like the selfish little bitch that he is!! Two stars.