All Comments on 'Monogamy - To Err is Human Ch. 01'

stupid cuck shit.

These two are being played by their best friends...what good and real friends they have...1*

I’m not a fan of role playing, so I skipped past most of this chapter. In the end, the husband gets an “accidental” blowjob. It’s fine for fantasy fiction, but it stretches the limits of plausibility. The neighbors wouldn’t likely “out” themselves as swingers in real life. They wouldn’t ask a non-swinger to be their camera man without having a lengthy discussion with his wife, setting the ground rules, etc. They certainly wouldn’t have any sexual contact without the wife’s permission. But hey, this is fiction! Just go with it!

That aside, the changes in tense, from present to past to past-perfect, made this a bit difficult to read. Stick with past tense. Pretend you’re telling a story to a good friend about something that happened to you a long time ago.

On to Chapter Two. (And kudos to you for actually submitting another chapter, unlike many of the authors here!)

OK. What else you got going on in your life?

Thanks but no thanks n. Terrible characters- selfish and don’t love anyone but themselves or what people can do to get them off. Just a group of loser lost in lust

No balls is still writing his garbage, he even had fans. I'm not one of them.