All Comments on 'Moth Drawn to Candle'

Horribly written. A newborn baby could write better than this shit.

Was this supposed to be a story or an outline of an idea? Really doesn't work on either level.

Butting in! Sorry, but it's too tempting -

1. Sketch: Brief account or narrative without detail.

2. Could also be incorporated as one of the scenes in a cabaret I wouldn't mind acting in - if the 'asides' were altered to accommodate such a change.

Yes this wasn't meant to be a story. It is simply an erotic skit of limited to no literary value. It wasn't intended to be such. Thanks Eve for your perceptive comment.