All Comments on 'Moving On'

Non erotic at best, certainly not ROMANCE 1*

Very confusing and too much background information.

Great start to what should be a longer tale of their re-budding romance. She needs a lot more flushing out as a character, too. Thanks for sharing!

I hope that this becomes the first chapter of a longer story.

Thoughtful and hopeful, especially for Jeanne. Generally, people don’t change, but sometimes they shed their youthful selfishness and grow up. I don’t know - maybe it’s hormones, maybe it’s loss, and realization. I like the message. I experienced something similar at 25 years old, and now we’ve been married 33 years.

The story did end abruptly. Considering how his internal dialogue carried most of the story, I expected perhaps a final thought. There’s still enough information to put finis to it. Kinda like The Sopranos ending. And the message still carries well. Anyway, I’ve been a fan for quite a while, and read most all of your submissions, so thank you.

the outside influence affect this relationship but of what concern,,,CH 2 is coming hopefully,,,TK U MLJ LV NV

Can we expect more, please?

Just like all of your works, I loved it. I think a her side of the story is warranted. Three months of being apart is a big hole. She needs to come clean, she may not have been unfaithful, but obviously she was very disrespectful. I am glad to see you back your stories are entertaining and top notch.

JMH1961

I found this intriguing. Not a romance, yet. The build up was confusing. Why bring Billy into it? I know of the bond between combat types. Specially Marines but it was rather drawn out I think. Jeannie and Coleen are friends. So? I'm hoping for another chapter to flesh out this story. 4 stars.

DragonRider55

I didn’t rate it. It seems like a disjointed incomplete tale.

This time it made a little more sense to me with potential for clarification in the next chapters, so rated it a 4.

Tried to understand the story, but lost it

I got the jist of the story, he saw and made her look at similarities between herself and the shitstain ex-wife that made him question their relationship and made her mad at him when she saw it as well, but after cooling down and gaining some clarity she started trying to get right.

A little disjointed and hard to track.

Don't bother to read the rest. This story goes nowhere.