by nickdemopolos
Sure wish I could be Wendy with her daddy/ I too fantasized about my dad
It is ALWAYS hot when the daughter compares herself to mom, and daddy chooses the daughter! Great story!
I hope you write more chapters He is a lucky man
Love the use of the language she used when talking to her father.. turns me on to no end.. Great story, keep writing.
bad, because there are characters with the depth of a sheet of paper and a plot which is even shallower. For me reading this was a complete waste of time.
You did a good job here. But don;t stop now, carry it on for a while. Enter maybe some of her new friends?
I sure hope you didn't spend more than 30 minutes writing this boring excuse for a story. Can you say "PREDICTABLE!"? <eyeroll>
Leave writing to writers, retard.
This story is perfect for a continuation. Very good...please write more!
One thing you cannot do is leave it there! Seems obvious they will go on from there - let us follow them.
The other thing is - check for a few small editing errors.
Lucas