All Comments on 'Murder Mystery Weekend Pt. 06'

This was a well thought out and well written piece of work and I could hardly stand it waiting for each new chapter. I hope that you keep writing and I look forward to reading it!

great story. just wished the epilogue was longer.

Fell in love with your storytelling on the bridge club. This story was another fantastic addition to your, hopefully, growing body of work. Thank you. Please keep writing.

Another excellent story. Very well done.

Really enjoyed this story! I do wish the buildup to Colin & Teresa getting back together was a bit more drawn out. I related to the story quite well, as I have partaken in a couple of Murder Mystery nights, and could picture the cottage as well, though I admittedly was replacing some of the scenes with my own cottage. The epilogue was a bit brief, but I suppose it provided some closure as well. Overall, well done. 5 * from me.

Loved the murder mystery setting, really made proceedings more fun than usual for a story like this.

I look forward to your next, this was a wonderful roller coaster with twists on every turn except one. Thanks again

You did a great job with this story. Loved it.

It's funny, I remember see the name of this story popping up and thinking that it sounded like an interesting read. However I kept passing it by not noticing Your name underneath. Had I connected the dots faster, I would have read this much sooner.

Easily better than The Bridge Club, and that was pretty damn good too!

I liked the story overall, the creativity and the effort to pull off a whodunit in an erotica was commendable. One thing I'm not really on point was how the relationship between Colin and Teresa developed. I didn't feel the spark between them, only Colin's frequent comments on her Mona Lisa smile and his compliments on her intellect showed his attraction to her. I know Teresa was supposed to lurk in the shadows and let Colin sow his oats and have some sort of epiphany but she was not really projecting anything more than platonic and supportive emotions to him. It would have been better if she showed some sort of jealousy, some subtle acts of being hurt that he was sleeping with other women, but there was nothing. I think they would have been better as best friends and Colin pursued Lena and ended up with her.

This was even better than your bridge weekend.

Great imagination required to develop a storyline like this one. Thank you for that!! Might have developed a few of the characters a bit more but that may also have lengthened the story excessively..

Thank you for sharing your excellent story telling.

Ed

I love the nice touch of having Leo being unable to tell Ee how he feels.

Very realistic.

You are really a good writer. l am duly impressed. And looking forward eagerly to your next tale.

very well crafted - thanks for this and I hope to see more from you soon

I loved their relationship. Very good writing

Nicely crafted!

After the disaster that was the bridge club (from my point of view) I was afraid to read this one. The titles of the chapters made me expect something else.

I have to admit that I didn't like the premise of the relationship, this "you should go fuck other people so you can come back to me a more mature man" thing doesn't quite jell right with me, but I'll just chalk it up to different outlooks on life.

I really liked the storyline, the murder mystery club setting was really well accomplished, and I was really hoping Ben would get some longer lasting comeuppance (alas, it was not to be).

All in all, pretty well crafted, apart from the main romance.

If only it had a huge orgy while everyone going at it. That would have been nice.

I also did not like the premise. She encouraged him to sleep with other women in the same house she was in. Knowing that he did so, she did not want him to wear a condom the next time they were together. Crazy.

I did have a lot of fun, really. BUT - I don't like the second main character, Teresa, at all. She says it herself: She's a manipulative woman. Makes me shudder. And unfortunately that has me questioning the main character, Colin, too. So - artfully written, very entertaining story, but the main characters are unrelatable for me. It's like a building I admire for its audacious construction, but would not dream of living in it.

This is SO GOOD. You really do a fantastic job with characters and realism between their personalities and interactions.

I don't know why people are quibbling about not liking the characters. With eleven characters if they they were all cute and cuddly there would be no interplay worth mentioning between them and it would be BORING! This was a clever and well crafted piece of writing and well worth the the money you paid - just be grateful.

What a fabulous story!!!!

Marvellous story, loved it. Straight into my favourites.

Must read some more of your works

5/5

I can't believe that it's been six years since I wrote this. It was fun to write. I completely understand the negative reactions to Theresa; it's difficult to present strong women, and I probably didn't do a very good job in that respect. I was trying to channel a kinder, gentler type of 'Dangerous Liaisons' relationship. He had a lot of growing up to do before they could be together.

I still have a lot of room to improve, but this isn't bad for a second effort.

Terrific story. It’s a challenge to cook up a fresh plot line and so many distinct personalities. I didn’t care about all of them equally, but when would that ever be true? Fwiw, strong female characters—like Theresa—tend to prompt negative reactions among literoticians, so I’d take those criticisms with a grain of salt. Well done!

You are the consummate story teller. From first page to last, you hold the reader in the palm of your hand. Your genius is that you are not writing stories that are just a carrier for sex, you are telling tales that hold our interest and the sex they contain is just natural and not "in your face". Keep writing, please.

and next Teresa will dump her ToyBoy for an "real Men", someone who play cold to her and is dating other "optional" women and don't put her on an pedestal. Really? Going back to an manipulative bitch that broke your heart bcs the men loved her? He should have dumped that bitch for the next women who appreciated his love. Beside this - great storyline, well written... of cause, the story seemes an little unrealistic at some points but it's still imaginative and fun to read. Thank you and be well