by Honeydew22031
Your story has a good vibe to it, the action flows, and it is interesting. What I would like is a bit more discription of surroundings and people involved. Embelish things a bit, draw it out. Sometimes a quickie is good and fine, but other times savoring the buildup and the act itself can be very fun. So have at it, and make us salviate more, cause I hope you will write more chapters, just more. Also a interesting thing would be to develop Ms Jelly some. Why does she do what she does etc, what are her motivations, well besides her own satisfaction. Like I said, more meat on the bone.
a little short but a great story. looking forward to the next chapter
Wow great story of how shemales rule. Trust me Momma will fuck that little boi pussy of yours because hot shemales always get what they want. They are rapidly taking over one man at a time.
Really love this. Looking forward to reading the entire series. Keep up your writing, it is very very good